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Random_Clod t1_j6lja4p wrote

Reply to comment by Koanos in [WP] Aliens with a Generational Consciousness (The mind goes on after the body dies into the next body. Kinda like The Doctor with unlimited regenerations) have befriended Humans. What happens when one of these aliens has to deal with the death of a favourite Human friend? by Slaywraith

Something I thought about this is, if there is an afterlife, they'll never see each other there because our narrator will never really be dead. And their beloved will be missing them forever as well. A beautiful tragedy. Well done.

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wiltyspinach t1_j6li9xy wrote

Reply to comment by t3hjs in [WP] Out of all the superpowers out there, you consider yours the most sadistic; you can save any number of innocent people from death in the face of danger, but to gain that ability, you must kill an innocent person. Named after the infamous moral thought experiment, you are... Trolley Man. by MarauderOnReddit

I won’t lie I misread the prompt and thought it was a one for one, so I added the tweak that if you kill this # of people, you can save that # of people at another time. So, he decided to bank them, but in banking them he found himself.

My take on it is that he went psycho after using it. It’s why he questions if anyone is truly innocent, if his powers only work in certain situations. Because what if he saved someone who later turned out to be bad? It’s a lot of guilt and power for one person and it broke him. Flipped the psychopath switch, and he now sees life as a sort of joke or game.

Edit: thanks for the compliment though!

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wandering_cirrus t1_j6li7ym wrote

Reply to comment by Ox_of_Dox in [WP] You formed a contract with an adventurer that allows them to summon you in their time of need. You haven’t been summoned for years, almost forgetting about the contract until suddenly you’re summoned into the palace where your beloved adventurer is on his knees with a sword to his neck. by Blackrose_920

This was interesting! It makes me wonder why the dragon originally decided to protect the woman.

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wandering_cirrus t1_j6li3s9 wrote

Reply to comment by Mr_E_Monkey in [WP] You formed a contract with an adventurer that allows them to summon you in their time of need. You haven’t been summoned for years, almost forgetting about the contract until suddenly you’re summoned into the palace where your beloved adventurer is on his knees with a sword to his neck. by Blackrose_920

This was cute! I really like how you went with the idea of something fantastic (Danshi) summoning a human instead of a human summoning something fantastic. Good words!

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queensara33 t1_j6lhvl0 wrote

Reply to comment by wandering_cirrus in [WP] You formed a contract with an adventurer that allows them to summon you in their time of need. You haven’t been summoned for years, almost forgetting about the contract until suddenly you’re summoned into the palace where your beloved adventurer is on his knees with a sword to his neck. by Blackrose_920

Haha, I'll have to dm you at some point then as I'll probably handwrite it first:)

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t3hjs t1_j6lha1f wrote

Reply to comment by wiltyspinach in [WP] Out of all the superpowers out there, you consider yours the most sadistic; you can save any number of innocent people from death in the face of danger, but to gain that ability, you must kill an innocent person. Named after the infamous moral thought experiment, you are... Trolley Man. by MarauderOnReddit

The writing is captivating and quite creepy. But trying to understand the theme, is it that the "hero" with such a power eventually goes psycho?

Or that there is no way to use/obtain such power without being psycho in the first place?

Having said that, are you taking the stance that killing 1 person to save many is not morally correct? Cause it seems to be put in a negative light

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grudthak t1_j6lgrp5 wrote

Reply to [WP] Out of all the superpowers out there, you consider yours the most sadistic; you can save any number of innocent people from death in the face of danger, but to gain that ability, you must kill an innocent person. Named after the infamous moral thought experiment, you are... Trolley Man. by MarauderOnReddit

"Ooooh I am going to regret this on the cold mornings"

I mused quietly, desperately trying to rub some life into my shoulder; that landing was just too damn hard. His shadow fell over me, and I knew before even looking up that he would be gloating. Way too many wannabe villains these days taking thier cues from Pro-Wrestling.

"Not gonna showboat? Come on, you got me down; you gotta make a scene of it now tough-guy; its your moment"

I uttered through gritted teeth, desperately trying to buy some more time, precious seconds to gulp down some air and keep the blood flowing. I went into this fight cold, a part of that whole Not-Wanting-To-Sacrifice-An-Innocent thing I have now.

The Ghetto Blaster laughed, not with any genuine humour; more like someone reading a script that simply says "laugh now".

"Awww not going to kill someone to beat me? Yeah I know who you are Trolley-Man! Just as well..."

I held my tongue, he was monologuing! Good! He turned around, a slow rotation with his arms raised in imminent victory.

"You would need to take out a whole Busload of people to be strong enough to defeat ME!"

There she was, standing off to the side watching wide-eyed; Blaster's 10 year old daughter Elaine...

"I don't need that"

I said just loud enough for him to register.

"I only need HER...!"

I rolled away from him, springing up to my feet immediately and sprinting to the edge of the rooftop where Elaine was standing, gripping her collar firmly and suspending her over the edge.

"NO DON'T... WAIIIIIT!!!"

Blaster's cry lost its' villainous edge, veering straight into protective father mode; too bad he didnt have that whenever he levelled an entire project and the families inside.

"Okay Blaster, you surrender right now... The cops are waiting with suppression cuffs. You give up and I dont kill Elaine and then you. How about it?"

To my relief, he saw sense and gave in, I held her there until the authorities had him neutralised and secured. It was as I brought her back that I finally looked back at her, seeing the absolute hatred burning in the pit of her soul. In that glance I saw her future, her gaining her own powers and yes; rising to become an S-Tier Supervillian.

I set her down on the ground without a word; wether an innocent or someone's innocence...

The sacrifice was still made...

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wandering_cirrus t1_j6lfpyt wrote

Reply to comment by jeffh4 in [WP] You formed a contract with an adventurer that allows them to summon you in their time of need. You haven’t been summoned for years, almost forgetting about the contract until suddenly you’re summoned into the palace where your beloved adventurer is on his knees with a sword to his neck. by Blackrose_920

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed!

I will admit, portraying non-human characters in a way that shows how Other they are while still making them relatable is one of the things I like to play with in my writing. It's awesome that you think I hit that this time!

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wandering_cirrus t1_j6lfj4d wrote

Reply to comment by RyzenR10 in [WP] You formed a contract with an adventurer that allows them to summon you in their time of need. You haven’t been summoned for years, almost forgetting about the contract until suddenly you’re summoned into the palace where your beloved adventurer is on his knees with a sword to his neck. by Blackrose_920

XD Well, I don't know if I have enough in me to write more about Andolin and Katiya, but if you want more of my words, you might like some of the things on my subreddit!

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NextEstablishment856 t1_j6lficp wrote

Reply to comment by Adm_Hawthorne in [WP] The Legendary Hero is prophesy to slay the Demon Queen, on his journey he meets a mysterious woman who joined him while falling for her, when they reach the castle the mysterious woman reveal herself to be the Demon Queen Heavily Pregnant with the hero's unborn child! by [deleted]

First off, absolutely love it. I do want to point out a couple word errors though. Progeny (offspring), not prodigy (talented person), and ruse (deception), not rouse (to wake). On a different note, I really want to read more and see what happens when King Henry finds out!

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wandering_cirrus t1_j6lf7ag wrote

Reply to comment by Cyneganders in [WP] You formed a contract with an adventurer that allows them to summon you in their time of need. You haven’t been summoned for years, almost forgetting about the contract until suddenly you’re summoned into the palace where your beloved adventurer is on his knees with a sword to his neck. by Blackrose_920

Awww, I'm so glad you enjoyed my story!

(I hope it isn't a permanent retirement, there are so many good writers and lovely stories here on WritingPrompts! XD)

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wandering_cirrus t1_j6leog3 wrote

Reply to comment by SwanQueen420 in [WP] You formed a contract with an adventurer that allows them to summon you in their time of need. You haven’t been summoned for years, almost forgetting about the contract until suddenly you’re summoned into the palace where your beloved adventurer is on his knees with a sword to his neck. by Blackrose_920

I don't know if there's enough in me to write a whole book about Andolin and Katiya, but I'm glad you liked enough that you'd read more. Thanks for reading!

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