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cheltsie t1_jd7idvn wrote
Reply to comment by AutoModerator in [WP] They say the food at Long Pig's Diner is to die for, but frankly, you don't trust the place. Everyone else in town seems to be addicted to it, but something about the over-all air of the place leaves a bad taste in your mouth no matter how much people try to persuade you to try it. by xylophonesRus
Anyone remember that one Goosebumps episode? The cafeteria at a boarding school that had kids brainwashed into being egg caretakers for aliens?
Definitely gives those vibes!
Degenerate0 t1_jd7h4wn wrote
C413B7 t1_jd7gj3r wrote
Reply to comment by EsquilaxM in [WP] A world famous detective is invited to a nobleman’s party, and all is well until there is a murder. Problem is, the one murdered was the detective. by Zak_The_Slack
Yup. Time to call the police. Let them handle it.
awebradisek t1_jd7fxe1 wrote
Reply to comment by Jobobhi in [WP] You work as tech support for ancient supernatural beings who are trying to adapt to the modern world. It's a frustrating - and at times dangerous - job, but at least your clients pay well. by aRandomFox-II
It's increasing it's power draw by 300 watts per hour. It needs to keep up with the power of Zues indefinitely.
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Reply to [WP] They say the food at Long Pig's Diner is to die for, but frankly, you don't trust the place. Everyone else in town seems to be addicted to it, but something about the over-all air of the place leaves a bad taste in your mouth no matter how much people try to persuade you to try it. by xylophonesRus
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Reply to [WP]A year ago all the stars in the night sky went out. Tonight they returned, but none of them were in the right place. by sticky-pete
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kokikitsune t1_jd75ih3 wrote
Reply to comment by Raging_Flames10 in [WP] You work as tech support for ancient supernatural beings who are trying to adapt to the modern world. It's a frustrating - and at times dangerous - job, but at least your clients pay well. by aRandomFox-II
I stream this kinda stuff on my twitch so maybe you can catch the next one in the making :D
kokikitsune t1_jd75gtc wrote
Reply to comment by aRandomFox-II in [WP] You work as tech support for ancient supernatural beings who are trying to adapt to the modern world. It's a frustrating - and at times dangerous - job, but at least your clients pay well. by aRandomFox-II
I don't know I was writing this on-stream whilst sleep-deprived T^T
librarian-faust t1_jd74f05 wrote
Reply to comment by Difficult-Theory-413 in [WP] A colony ship with 5000 human passengers in stasis is heavily damaged in a meteor shower. While the onboard computer does not have the raw materials needed for repairs, it calculates that it has a very large amount of organic matter and a genetics lab. A solution path is now being executed... by lordhelmos
It's a good one, but I feel like it needs more.
What's the protagonist going to do? Issue orders and go back to Cryo? Interrogate the AI and learn that... he's the second to last one to awaken, and he needs to patch up systems and then report to Recycling for disassembly?
It's a great "oh god, everything went wrong", but there's no motion to the story. Just a cold, still, scene. Which is GREAT. And fitting. And a perfect end, if that's what you intended.
I just always feel like there should be something of "what do I do now?", and "were samples kept? Will the colonists be revived? Are they all uploaded to the biocomputer matrix?"
I always want a protagonist, a character, to have an action or motion to them. Something to look forward to. So that you have an idea what they're doing, five minutes after the story ends.
I have no idea what your protagonist is doing five minutes post-story, besides going back to the now cold dregs of his abandoned coffee, feeling a slowly dawning horror, then suiting up like the guy from Dead Space in case of "ship's haunted".
librarian-faust t1_jd73v8j wrote
Reply to comment by TentacleJihadHentai in [WP] A colony ship with 5000 human passengers in stasis is heavily damaged in a meteor shower. While the onboard computer does not have the raw materials needed for repairs, it calculates that it has a very large amount of organic matter and a genetics lab. A solution path is now being executed... by lordhelmos
I feel like this would be one of the lines from a Darkest Dungeon character if it was a cheerful pervy manga rather than the pitchblack horror setting it is.
librarian-faust t1_jd73psz wrote
Reply to comment by Susceptive in [WP] A colony ship with 5000 human passengers in stasis is heavily damaged in a meteor shower. While the onboard computer does not have the raw materials needed for repairs, it calculates that it has a very large amount of organic matter and a genetics lab. A solution path is now being executed... by lordhelmos
Wow. I feel like my entry had the same idea as yours, I just did talking heads with an optimistic AI, whilst yours leaned HARD into the horror.
I love it.
((I'm halfway tempted to repost mine as a comment answer to yours, now. Mine's up in the "non story comments" area because it's 99.5% talking heads and that's lazy writing.))
librarian-faust t1_jd73f83 wrote
Reply to comment by Bevroren in [WP] A colony ship with 5000 human passengers in stasis is heavily damaged in a meteor shower. While the onboard computer does not have the raw materials needed for repairs, it calculates that it has a very large amount of organic matter and a genetics lab. A solution path is now being executed... by lordhelmos
Thank you. I appreciate the compliment. I just don't like pure talking-heads like this as fiction... it'd want world-building, set-dressing, and prose that isn't just two characters in dialogue, to be something I'd like reading, you know?
I feel like talking-heads is lazy writing like script-fics (... excuse me whilst I have trauma flashbacks to 20 years ago on ffn.) - or its modern equivalent the Whatsapp Group Chat fic.
Probably a fault of my personal taste more so than anything else. Feel like someone with my tastes would downvote what I wrote for it being lazy writing, and missing the meat of the writing.
But regardless, I'm glad you enjoyed it and I'll consider putting it in the main post if I do another like this.
librarian-faust t1_jd734ql wrote
Reply to comment by Gaelhelemar in [WP] A colony ship with 5000 human passengers in stasis is heavily damaged in a meteor shower. While the onboard computer does not have the raw materials needed for repairs, it calculates that it has a very large amount of organic matter and a genetics lab. A solution path is now being executed... by lordhelmos
I wanted to keep it optimistic. A cynical or pessimistic AI might kill the passengers or give up. Optimism and hope keeps us moving forward.
aRandomFox-II OP t1_jd6z6xw wrote
Reply to comment by Fun-Preparation8575 in [WP] You work as tech support for ancient supernatural beings who are trying to adapt to the modern world. It's a frustrating - and at times dangerous - job, but at least your clients pay well. by aRandomFox-II
Seems like this could be a good opening to a longer story. Lots of spelling errors, though.
fhangrin t1_jd6ye2p wrote
Reply to comment by NicomacheanOrc in [WP] "You're the best person I've ever known," you say, and you both draw your blades. "I will regret your death more than all the others of the world." He replies quietly: "I know, my child, and I give my blessing to the world you'll make. But let us start your story, and end mine." And you clash. by NicomacheanOrc
See, now I wanna know what conclusions you drew.
S-K_215 OP t1_jd6w329 wrote
Reply to comment by Shalidar13 in [WP]You're a peaceful witch who survived the witch trials 100s of years ago, who now lives in the woods outside a small town. One day, a young woman visits you, saying shes related to you which she learned via the internet and she wants to be your apprentice by S-K_215
I love it!
S-K_215 OP t1_jd6w1mu wrote
Reply to comment by TerrificTooMan in [WP]You're a peaceful witch who survived the witch trials 100s of years ago, who now lives in the woods outside a small town. One day, a young woman visits you, saying shes related to you which she learned via the internet and she wants to be your apprentice by S-K_215
I liked it!
jasonhackwith t1_jd6uy4s wrote
Reply to comment by AB_Wordsmythe_Esq in [WP] The wizard is actually not immortal. Instead he steals just a minute from everyone every few thousand years or so (justifying it to himself by all the good he does for them). Though everyone loses consciousness for a moment, nobody talks about it, and it is soon forgotten. by chacham2
I wholeheartedly agree.
This needs to be a novel.
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NicomacheanOrc OP t1_jd6t5j5 wrote
Reply to comment by fhangrin in [WP] "You're the best person I've ever known," you say, and you both draw your blades. "I will regret your death more than all the others of the world." He replies quietly: "I know, my child, and I give my blessing to the world you'll make. But let us start your story, and end mine." And you clash. by NicomacheanOrc
That's a great last line. First I thought about the feather, contrasting against the mountain. Cool, cool. And then I thought about the "home" part, and it really hit me. And then I thought about the "we" part and it blew my mind.
NicomacheanOrc OP t1_jd6sphi wrote
Reply to comment by Jyx_The_Berzer_King in [WP] "You're the best person I've ever known," you say, and you both draw your blades. "I will regret your death more than all the others of the world." He replies quietly: "I know, my child, and I give my blessing to the world you'll make. But let us start your story, and end mine." And you clash. by NicomacheanOrc
>"The sword must never be brandished with a clouded mind or ill intent. It is polished and thus a mirror; our actions are reflected back at us, and we will always look back in time and see the ones we have killed in its surface.
Badass. Quote saved for reference at my next cocktail party.
SomeoneNooneTomatoes t1_jd6s37e wrote
Reply to comment by Acceptable_Tip_1979 in [WP] You've spent years building up your remote mountain stronghold. Now, when you're finally done and sit down with a good book and a cup of coffee, the heroes arrive... by filwi
Really quite charming.
lordhelmos OP t1_jd6rong wrote
Reply to comment by Susceptive in [WP] A colony ship with 5000 human passengers in stasis is heavily damaged in a meteor shower. While the onboard computer does not have the raw materials needed for repairs, it calculates that it has a very large amount of organic matter and a genetics lab. A solution path is now being executed... by lordhelmos
Very intentionally put this in general, so people get surprise creepy pasta'ed
Useless_homosapien t1_jd7j30k wrote
Reply to comment by NikiTheBlob in [WP] Everyone loves the brooding Adventurer who took a liking to your village. For weeks, they have been quietly enjoying your peaceful ways and helping around. The Hero's secret is that this is only delaying the inevitable. Once they go back to advancing the Main Quest, the village will be doomed. by Daedal75
I see that Viva La Vida line