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QuantisOne OP t1_je5qdqy wrote

Reply to comment by WesternSol in [WP] To finally solve all problems caused by humans, God made six new earths, to separate everyone depending on their sins, Earth 1 being for the best people and Earth 7 for the worst sinners. Every 50 years, angels arrive and re-judge people to decide if they should stay, go up or down. by QuantisOne

”Nothing intelligently designed is designed intelligently”. What a great opening line. Really like how this one put into perspective the obvious flaws of the system. The idea that to access Earth 1, it’s not just you but your entire bloodline that must earn it. Kids going to Earth 1 (then again, is there more perverse soul than a child’s ?), this idealization of other Earths, very good.

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Scrub_nin t1_je5p347 wrote

Reply to comment by sadnesslaughs in [WP] To finally solve all problems caused by humans, God made six new earths, to separate everyone depending on their sins, Earth 1 being for the best people and Earth 7 for the worst sinners. Every 50 years, angels arrive and re-judge people to decide if they should stay, go up or down. by QuantisOne

Feels like dystopian Angel beats from Angel’s perspective. I would definitely watch that anime

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NextEstablishment856 t1_je5p1sx wrote

Reply to [WP] You are a budget mage. While most of your colleagues use costly ingredients, rituals that take weeks to prepare and use a new spell for every problem, you only know a few spells, use common household ingredients and prepare rituals within minutes. They unjustly deride your work as shoddy. by Kitty_Fuchs

"Fast, cheap, or good. You only get two." That's what they say.

Thing is, most wizards don't do fast or cheap. They spend days, even weeks, designing a spell, and they always demand the best ingredients for it. You give them a problem, they take forever to tell you to go halfway round the world for the pieces of a solution.

And yeah, it's a good solution, but by the time you have it, you have new problems. Old one may even have solved itself. It's why only the most desperate folks go to the Guild for help.

Meanwhile, I'm out here. I give you a solution before you leave my shop, and it's all done with stuff from the corner store. And here's the kicker: it may not be the perfect answer the Guildies would give, they may not say it's good, but it's good enough.

Example time, this minor lord drops by, has a banquet coming up, king is supposed to drop in. Only his kitchen has a rat problem suddenly. The early snow likely drove them inside.

I have him get some ham, flower petals (I recommended rose, but let him know any would do. He went with carnations), and a bit of brick dust. I had plenty of fairy bits (I keep traps for common ones, like grigs and pixies, year round. Most spells, you don't need a specific kind) that I added. Done before the hour was up. He laid it out, it drew the rats in, and POOF they turn into teaspoons for the next three days. Staff would pick them up and they got shipped away before they turned back.

Sure, it's not the solution he'd expected, but it got the job done, and in time for the banquet. He wasn't seen spending tons of time with a wizards (which is rightly seen as suspicious behavior), and he didn't have to drop a frigging mint to get rid of some rats with magic.

And off the record, sometimes, you get a little bonus with my spells. Don't tell anyone, but there's a rumor he gifted out some "commemorative teaspoons" to other nobles.

So if you need it to be perfect, money is no object, and time is irrelevant, you can go to the Guild. For anything you have to face in your real life, talk to me.

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Reply to [WP] You only needed to travel 2 stops, but your train has been accelerating through the same tunnel for the last half an hour and you and your fellow passengers are starting to worry. by SquooshyMarshmallows

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WesternSol t1_je5m24r wrote

Reply to [WP] To finally solve all problems caused by humans, God made six new earths, to separate everyone depending on their sins, Earth 1 being for the best people and Earth 7 for the worst sinners. Every 50 years, angels arrive and re-judge people to decide if they should stay, go up or down. by QuantisOne

"A newborn child bear no sins."

--Gol D Roger

The truth is: Nothing intelligently designed is designed intelligently. It takes failure and iterative prototyping to create something worth anything. That's what evolution is. But evolution is slow, tolerable. You'd never know that you were affected by it, how you have changed compared to your fellow man. This system is immediate and very visible.

I was born in year 40. I'm told my mother was born in year 20 a cycle ago, and her mother in year 49 two cycles ago. My cousin was born in March of 49 last cycle. I will never forget my aunt over those 9 months. She seemed happy, yet the melancholy of inevitability hung over us all. On January 1st of 0, this cycle, some were transferred up, some down, some not at all. My aunt wasn't transferred. But every child under two (and most under 6) was immediately transferred to Earth 1. I don't know how my cousin's doing, but she's probably well taken care of. I've heard (though, the source of the rumor is unknown) that disease and pain don't exist in Earth 1, that there are no problems at all. But I know how my aunt is doing.

There are infinite of stories of people losing loved ones who fly or fall. Families infinitely broken and torn apart every 50 years. People recount their grandparents tales of never knowing their own parents. Some people prefer it that way. Its become quite the debate: As a parent, should you take care of your children by guaranteeing they get into Earth 1 if possible, but never see them again? Or is it more ethical to avoid sending your children to paradise but to give them a family instead? The inverse has been known to happen as well. Parents making it to Earth 3 while their 10 year old is left here, or even drops to Earth 5.

Almost no one ends up where they belong. And it takes generations to move from the top to the bottom or visa versa, since the maximum possible number of transfers per person is three. Someone born on 4 like me? If I'd behaved perfectly my entire life, I'd never even see Earth 1. I'd be stuck at 2. But my cousin, god bless her, is in 1, having never made a conscious choice in her life prior to arriving there. And my aunt? She's not on any Earth. Hasn't been since February of 0, this cycle.

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Aftel43 OP t1_je5l4xf wrote

Reply to comment by [deleted] in [OT] Writing humor, whether as just to lighten the mood of the current situation happening in the text or just as comedy. What has made you laugh that much that you had to pause the reading? by Aftel43

True, my own is from His Majesty's Dragon second book. Where the handler discovered that his dragon has been stealing livestock (even if it was meant for the dragons) and taught how to do it to others. When the dragon made a statement of having to chase and count sheep. To which the handler just remarked "By the heavens" and started laughing.

I at first didn't realize why, then few sentences later it hit me why and I had to pause. Granted the first book has few amusing moments too.

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MrNanashi t1_je5ku9d wrote

Reply to comment by sadnesslaughs in [WP] To finally solve all problems caused by humans, God made six new earths, to separate everyone depending on their sins, Earth 1 being for the best people and Earth 7 for the worst sinners. Every 50 years, angels arrive and re-judge people to decide if they should stay, go up or down. by QuantisOne

I love this!

But tbh i dont think i understand the part about Alex being a "prisoner". Is it because that he has finally been corrupted to be a sinner himself, or cuz he has been obsessed, that his ideal has imprisoned him like the sinners imprisoned themselves with their sins?

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Reply to [WP] You and the Other 'You's have finally managed to open an exit to the simulated world. One 'You' takes the first steps out, and vaporizes into nothing more than data- They were never real, after all. The threshold stands by in silent judgement, waiting for another 'You' to believe they are You. by Wise_Mulberry3568

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Real-Bad-Habits t1_je5iuan wrote

Reply to [OT] Writing humor, whether as just to lighten the mood of the current situation happening in the text or just as comedy. What has made you laugh that much that you had to pause the reading? by Aftel43

It was actually on here. It was a prompt about a Groundhog Day scenario where the main character relives the same day over and over. He dies and has to relive the day when his town is bombed. So after thousands of attempts to stop it he succeeds and it ends with drinking that night in celebration. The next morning he finds himself still reliving the same day after realizing that he gave himself alcohol poisoning and has to do it all again

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Reply to [WP] You are a budget mage. While most of your colleagues use costly ingredients, rituals that take weeks to prepare and use a new spell for every problem, you only know a few spells, use common household ingredients and prepare rituals within minutes. They unjustly deride your work as shoddy. by Kitty_Fuchs

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driu76 t1_je5irmb wrote

Reply to comment by FahboyMan in [WP] A new teacher at the school sees ghostly messages written on the blackboard, but they're always warm and friendly. One afternoon however they see the messages with a messy script saying: "Run, beware, hide!" by Shadrak_Meduson

Nope! It's "err" - it's a word that has fallen mostly out of use, originating in Latin and coming to English from Old French. It's similar to "error" (not just in spelling) meaning "to be mistaken, incorrect" or "fail to adhere to the proper or accepted standards; do wrong"

I'm not an English teacher, but I used to read the dictionary for fun like a nerd

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QuantisOne OP t1_je5i4c7 wrote

Reply to comment by SirPiecemaker in [WP] To finally solve all problems caused by humans, God made six new earths, to separate everyone depending on their sins, Earth 1 being for the best people and Earth 7 for the worst sinners. Every 50 years, angels arrive and re-judge people to decide if they should stay, go up or down. by QuantisOne

Hm… like I said for u/ThiefCitron’s story, this is a very deep problematic here, using this novel as a way to depict the flaws of current religion.

Who could imagine after all ? Sins aren’t like a disease you can cure, get vaccinated from, or avoid by staying with other clean people. They are innate, proper to humanity.

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