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Reply to [WP] You finally did it, you built a time machine! You head back 2000 years to Jerusalem, thinking you'd finally end the debate and see Jesus for yourself... but, when you finally find him and look at him, he suddenly turns towards you as if struck by an invisible force, rage visible in his eyes. by NewRomanian
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Crystal1501 OP t1_izp1zxy wrote
Reply to comment by WilliamSyler in [WP] You get a knock. You open the door to see your nemesis, bruised and beaten, with your child. "Just saved their life. Need to go home and rest." Your nemesis turns to leave. You grab their arm. "Hang on. I want you to tell me what happened." You drag them inside. by Crystal1501
This was tragic but beautiful... I think Paul should insist that Valor gets to look after Malory.
jjtitula t1_izp1uiz wrote
Reply to comment by WilliamSyler in [WP] You get a knock. You open the door to see your nemesis, bruised and beaten, with your child. "Just saved their life. Need to go home and rest." Your nemesis turns to leave. You grab their arm. "Hang on. I want you to tell me what happened." You drag them inside. by Crystal1501
That was awesome, love the emotion conveyed! Sensing a switching of sides and a team up! Part 2?
[deleted] t1_izp0w15 wrote
Reply to [WP] You finally did it, you built a time machine! You head back 2000 years to Jerusalem, thinking you'd finally end the debate and see Jesus for yourself... but, when you finally find him and look at him, he suddenly turns towards you as if struck by an invisible force, rage visible in his eyes. by NewRomanian
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WilliamSyler t1_izp0f42 wrote
Reply to [WP] You get a knock. You open the door to see your nemesis, bruised and beaten, with your child. "Just saved their life. Need to go home and rest." Your nemesis turns to leave. You grab their arm. "Hang on. I want you to tell me what happened." You drag them inside. by Crystal1501
I had been sitting in my apartment, nursing a hot chocolate as the cold winter's day perfectly emulated my mood. I was bested, captured, and my identity revealed. I was arrested and charged for my crimes, and only because of a technicality could I be under house arrest. Not that I would violate that, I'm going to continue being on my best behavior. But the worst part was that it wasn't even my nemesis who did it. I had no doubt she would if she had the chance, but she never got to because of that new speedster.
I looked at my phone again to see no response. It was unusual that my ex-wife hadn't responded to my inquiries of how Malory's day was going, but maybe that was just because I'm now too infamous for her safety. I wouldn't blame her, but I can't not worry about my daughter.
Then there was a sudden knock at my door. I looked out the exterior window to the cops "taking a break" outside my ground-floor apartment; they looked flabbergasted at the building's entrance, but didn't have any weapons drawn. Concerned but cautious, I went up to the door and- blast, the peephole was still cloudy as hell. I opened the door.
Standing in the entryway, my 2-year old daughter asleep in her arms, was Valor. My nemesis. I leapt back and activated my "combat pre-cog" ability, but the analysis part of my power stopped me before I could lash out. It was only then that I saw that Valor was battered and bruised, her armor wrecked. Who could've hit Valor with that much force, I boggled. And my power noted that she wasn't even going for a combat stance at all. But there was pain in her eyes, that she had seen me react to her presence like she would hurt me.
She wouldn't, not now.
I relaxed as Valor tried to hide her pained reaction. Gently, she handed over my daughter and said, "Just saved her life. Need to go home and rest." As she turned to leave, I grabbed her arm gently and asked, "Hang on, I want you to tell me what happened." I began to pull her inside and she didn't resist, but she did stop briefly to waive away the police officers who had opened the front door and were coming into the entryway.
As Valor sat down I laid my Malory on the couch and put a blanket on her. I then went to get a mug of coffee and brought it to Valor. She drank deeply from the scalding mug, a reminder that she was absurdly tough even at her weakest, as I sat down and picked up my hot chocolate. Her eyes darted over to the window, and I looked out to see the officers observing. I nodded to them, enjoying the surprise on their face, before turning back to Valor.
She took an entire minute just to think. I had seen her do this before, her eyes darting back and forth as she pondered things deeply. Despite the fact that I had literally precognitive abilities, she still thought faster than any baseline human and I would not underestimate her. Then her eyes caught mine, and she flushed with embarrassment as she realized I was waiting for a response.
"Caroline's dead," she said simply.
No. My ex-wife was dead?
"What happened," I nearly shouted.
"Shh," she reminded me quickly. "A 'privileged witness' had notified me that the villain Rahul had killed a woman at a coffee joint in Gibson and absconded with a child. I came out as quick as I could, and found him monologuing to a news van about what he was going to do to her if you didn't come out to face him."
Holy shit. That bastard Rahul had targeted me directly? And one of Valor's family members, most certainly a civilian, had seen my ex-wife die. "Why hadn't I heard about this?"
"He had been talking to them for less than a minute when I arrived. I'm sure if you turned on the news now, it'll be all over."
My eyes involuntarily flicked over to the unpowered television before I looked back a Valor. She gave a little grin of recognition, remembering all the times she's done that same maneuver to me before, before she continued.
"I gave him the best sucker punch I had upon arrival and he thankfully dropped your daughter. I took the fight as far out as I could, but Rahul had his newest strength-serum already injected. I promise I didn't kill him, but the comedown from his serum combined with what I did to him was too much for his body to handle."
"What the fuck? Rahul's dead too? Jesus, that must've been some serum. I know how you fight, and you absolutely would disable him with the minimum amount of injury. Had he not analyzed this formula before?"
"Dunno, didn't care to ask," she said with a small grin. I couldn't help but enjoy the dark humor as well. "Couldn't leave your daughter with the cops, it didn't feel right."
I looked over to Malory, lamenting that they'll probably demand to take her somewhere "safe" soon. "It would've been the right thing to do, though, but I appreciate it more than I can say. I won't resist when they do come to get her though."
"I'm sorry Darkstar. I-"
"Please, Valor, it's just Paul now."
There was a moment of silence before a thought came to mind. "I can't help but think that the brat who caught me needs to learn that this is why we don't unmask each other so abruptly." I could feel the anger seeping into my words.
"I know. I told Wildstride to turn himself into custody as I was flying your daughter here. He does need to be held accountable to his part of this, or at least whatever the jury decides his part is."
I scoffed. "Then the jury will side with the 'heroes' again. They always do."
"You might be surprised," Valor responded as she grabbed my remote and turned on the TV.
The story flashed across the news, and they were describing it as a tragedy. I watched in surprise as the news stated the situation to a background video of Valor wrecking Rahul's left knee, and their sympathy towards my ex-wife was bleeding over to me too.
"It really does help that all your crimes were basically illegal take-downs of corruption and you never hurt, or even threatened, any innocent people. Hell, there's even a discussion going on online about the time you stopped Rahul from killing those civilians."
I grinned at that memory. "What can I say? That bastard absolutely deserved it."
Then another knock at my door, this one expected. I got up and let in the pair of officers who said, "Paul, the bosses are ordering that we get your daughter into protective custody ASAP. Sorry."
Before I could respond, Valor asked, "Can we at least wait until she wakes up? I'll be here until then."
The officer hesitated, but seeing the look on Valor's face he crumpled. "Sure, as long as we can wait in here as well."
"Of course, wouldn't want you all to freeze," I said as I sat down next to my sleeping angel. I looked up to Valor and I knew that she could see the gratitude in my eyes. Looking down at Malory, I resolved not to cry until they all left.
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reeko1982 t1_izp0150 wrote
Reply to comment by dardios in [WP] You finally did it, you built a time machine! You head back 2000 years to Jerusalem, thinking you'd finally end the debate and see Jesus for yourself... but, when you finally find him and look at him, he suddenly turns towards you as if struck by an invisible force, rage visible in his eyes. by NewRomanian
And an immense cameo from George Carlin!
GForceHangover t1_izoy9rf wrote
Reply to comment by outflies in [WP] You finally did it, you built a time machine! You head back 2000 years to Jerusalem, thinking you'd finally end the debate and see Jesus for yourself... but, when you finally find him and look at him, he suddenly turns towards you as if struck by an invisible force, rage visible in his eyes. by NewRomanian
You can buy anything in Bulgaria.
GForceHangover t1_izovlq6 wrote
Reply to comment by GForceHangover in [WP] You finally did it, you built a time machine! You head back 2000 years to Jerusalem, thinking you'd finally end the debate and see Jesus for yourself... but, when you finally find him and look at him, he suddenly turns towards you as if struck by an invisible force, rage visible in his eyes. by NewRomanian
I had expected awe in quietly seeing the supposed Son of God; the highlight of my long life of dedication. To touch Him. To hear His voice. I could treasure an experience as the only person alive in my time to do so, perhaps even to bury myself and the machine in the sea to disguise my experience. I did not expect to be scolded, huddled in the fetal position as 2,000 Israelites stared with fear as their Prophet berated a stranger in a language that would not be spoken for 1,500 years.
I finally found my voice, “L-Lord, how do you know me?”
He glared down at me, seemingly indecisive for the first time since I had seen Him. He turned and spoke quickly to the group (the Apostles?) standing fearfully behind Him.
The men began to shout at the crowd and shoo them away. The man I believed to be Jesus looked at me again and extended His hand. “Come. Lots broken. Walk.”
The crowd disbursed unhappily, but also with deference and awe. I took His hand and he pulled me up, then hurried me back in the direction of my machine.
I tried to get me bearings. “Are you Jesus?”
He glanced at me and kept walking, hurrying me along.
“I… I need to know!” I planted my feet. “If you know me I have traveled further than anyone ever has to see you. I have to know.”
He stopped, braced Himself and turned with fury in His eyes. “Sad question. You hear stories and think I am God? SMALL thinking! TOURIST! Come!”
He continued down the beach and I hurried to catch up. I spoke again in Koine, “Why is my thinking small, Lord? Help me understand.”
He spoke in Greek while maintaining a hurried pace, “We can’t catch all of you. People who want to grab a piece of the history and take it like a barbarian, a thief. You understand nothing of our work.”
I ran ahead, blocking Him. “Then make me understand! I’ve come so far!”
“Does it occur to you that there is more to life than knowledge and the small-minded memories you collect like the ornamented tombs of the rich? More than mountaintops and records to be broken? I am here to keep billions from tragedy and disaster! To you, I am some artifact who seems strange and antiquated because you have no context! You could live a thousand times and still not comprehend the simplest lesson because you are a vapor! A mist! Your existence is only meaningful because you, a child, use the fundamental structures we have built as a toy when it is equipment built with purpose. You see a single page of a book and presume to know the whole text! You are an irritant! An insect that bites the horse and crashes the cart. People need to hear the words I tell them. A single brick among billions is put in place. Do you understand? You interrupt the infinite.”
I stood in silence. The language lacked the complexities He likely needed to convey the grand ideas He referenced, but it made me feel like a scolded child. I was just a tourist, transgressing on a sacred space for my own petty wishes, touching the face of God like it was a trophy with no grasp of what I interrupted. Grander purposes could truly be at play and I, in 30 years of pursuit, could only think of my own narrow, tawdry wishes.
We walked the rest of the way in silence. He walked to my covered craft and threw back the burlap sheet. He disappeared inside a moment, spoke quietly to Himself, then emerged.
“Your ship will get you home now. Do not return.” I looked inside to see that several wires had been removed and reconnected with other parts broken. It looked rather like a hot wired car as the familiar whine began.
I paused and looked at Him and took Him in for the first time. He seemed so ordinary. I had to ask.
“I… I have to ask before I return; are you the Christ? Is it true?”
He shook his head. “When you look at a mirror or an image of yourself, is that you? Would a person who looked at you know your fears?”
He turned away and spoke looking at the sun. “That’s what you say I Am. I suppose that will do.”
The whine reached its apex. I closed the door. Bang. The sting of ozone filled my nostrils. I had touched something that filled me with awe; both wonder and terror. As I opened the latch, I found myself back at the Sea of Galilee with Israeli soldiers headed my way. They shouted at me, but I ignored them. I suddenly felt very small.
outflies t1_izov2kx wrote
Reply to comment by GForceHangover in [WP] You finally did it, you built a time machine! You head back 2000 years to Jerusalem, thinking you'd finally end the debate and see Jesus for yourself... but, when you finally find him and look at him, he suddenly turns towards you as if struck by an invisible force, rage visible in his eyes. by NewRomanian
didn't expect to see bulgaria in a prompt but i'm happy that it's in this one
Darth_Quietus t1_izou9s8 wrote
Reply to comment by FunkiestFetus in [WP] The revenge driven protagonist hunts his fathers killer for years, only to discover that he was now a loving family man with a son. The killer suffers from heavy guilt for his past actions and has now worked hard to be a better man to everyone, and is beloved for his kindness and generosity. by Dismal-Fan-4716
Yus pwease
dardios t1_izotho9 wrote
Reply to comment by reeko1982 in [WP] You finally did it, you built a time machine! You head back 2000 years to Jerusalem, thinking you'd finally end the debate and see Jesus for yourself... but, when you finally find him and look at him, he suddenly turns towards you as if struck by an invisible force, rage visible in his eyes. by NewRomanian
No mention of Carlin?
jex0 t1_izor16p wrote
Reply to comment by GForceHangover in [WP] You finally did it, you built a time machine! You head back 2000 years to Jerusalem, thinking you'd finally end the debate and see Jesus for yourself... but, when you finally find him and look at him, he suddenly turns towards you as if struck by an invisible force, rage visible in his eyes. by NewRomanian
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[deleted] t1_izoqqin wrote
Reply to comment by [deleted] in [WP] You get a knock. You open the door to see your nemesis, bruised and beaten, with your child. "Just saved their life. Need to go home and rest." Your nemesis turns to leave. You grab their arm. "Hang on. I want you to tell me what happened." You drag them inside. by Crystal1501
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reeko1982 t1_izoqn9x wrote
Reply to comment by crfnalti in [WP] You finally did it, you built a time machine! You head back 2000 years to Jerusalem, thinking you'd finally end the debate and see Jesus for yourself... but, when you finally find him and look at him, he suddenly turns towards you as if struck by an invisible force, rage visible in his eyes. by NewRomanian
It’s a very funny Kevin Smith film with Matt Damon and Ben Affleck, about the hypocrisy of Catholicism. Great supporting performances from Alan Rickman, Chris Rock and Salma Hayek.
Looxond t1_izopp4t wrote
Reply to comment by AutoModerator in [WP] You finally did it, you built a time machine! You head back 2000 years to Jerusalem, thinking you'd finally end the debate and see Jesus for yourself... but, when you finally find him and look at him, he suddenly turns towards you as if struck by an invisible force, rage visible in his eyes. by NewRomanian
Jesus is the first JoJo according to part 7
crfnalti t1_izop6ak wrote
Reply to comment by velabas in [WP] You finally did it, you built a time machine! You head back 2000 years to Jerusalem, thinking you'd finally end the debate and see Jesus for yourself... but, when you finally find him and look at him, he suddenly turns towards you as if struck by an invisible force, rage visible in his eyes. by NewRomanian
"I saw Jesus"
"Yes, people around the world all see Jesus.."
"And he was like.. mega pissed that I time travelled there."
"He was what?"
crfnalti t1_izop0k2 wrote
Reply to comment by Great_n_powerful_ODD in [WP] You finally did it, you built a time machine! You head back 2000 years to Jerusalem, thinking you'd finally end the debate and see Jesus for yourself... but, when you finally find him and look at him, he suddenly turns towards you as if struck by an invisible force, rage visible in his eyes. by NewRomanian
Taking one for the team, what's dogma?
[deleted] t1_izooa5s wrote
Reply to [WP] You finally did it, you built a time machine! You head back 2000 years to Jerusalem, thinking you'd finally end the debate and see Jesus for yourself... but, when you finally find him and look at him, he suddenly turns towards you as if struck by an invisible force, rage visible in his eyes. by NewRomanian
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[deleted] t1_izon94j wrote
Reply to comment by [deleted] in [WP] You get a knock. You open the door to see your nemesis, bruised and beaten, with your child. "Just saved their life. Need to go home and rest." Your nemesis turns to leave. You grab their arm. "Hang on. I want you to tell me what happened." You drag them inside. by Crystal1501
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[deleted] t1_izom7j3 wrote
Reply to comment by [deleted] in [WP] You get a knock. You open the door to see your nemesis, bruised and beaten, with your child. "Just saved their life. Need to go home and rest." Your nemesis turns to leave. You grab their arm. "Hang on. I want you to tell me what happened." You drag them inside. by Crystal1501
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asimo101 t1_izolcgj wrote
Reply to comment by GForceHangover in [WP] You finally did it, you built a time machine! You head back 2000 years to Jerusalem, thinking you'd finally end the debate and see Jesus for yourself... but, when you finally find him and look at him, he suddenly turns towards you as if struck by an invisible force, rage visible in his eyes. by NewRomanian
Looking forward to more
[deleted] t1_izoh89c wrote
Reply to [WP] You finally did it, you built a time machine! You head back 2000 years to Jerusalem, thinking you'd finally end the debate and see Jesus for yourself... but, when you finally find him and look at him, he suddenly turns towards you as if struck by an invisible force, rage visible in his eyes. by NewRomanian
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[deleted] t1_izofmxz wrote
Reply to comment by [deleted] in [WP] You get a knock. You open the door to see your nemesis, bruised and beaten, with your child. "Just saved their life. Need to go home and rest." Your nemesis turns to leave. You grab their arm. "Hang on. I want you to tell me what happened." You drag them inside. by Crystal1501
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Journalist_Ready t1_izp3qkt wrote
Reply to comment by AutoModerator in [WP] You decide to abandon your youth by burning all of your toys from childhood. As you strike the match to light the bonfire you start hearing begging from the firepit to not burn them to death. by XantosZ
I would pour more gasoline