chacham2 OP t1_j3wuvce wrote on January 11, 2023 at 4:54 PM

You said it was part of the series, you made it quite clear. I don't mean to insult, i just didn't like the series, i guess. Regardless, i liked the setup. That part got me engaged.

The thrust of my reply was to compliment you for that first part. :)

chacham2 OP t1_itm4c3g wrote on October 24, 2022 at 5:34 PM

Reply to comment by Crystal1501 in [WP] You wake up disoriented when offered some rags to cover your naked body. Eventually, you remember you were king. A coup used an arcane spell to change your looks and displace you, leaving only your family's birthmark. People assume you are dead, but the new ruler is still looking to kill you. by chacham2

That the king gave up. Also, that's some random individual seem to know everything about the tattoo and believe him right away. Being you're writing a series about the other character, that actually makes quite a bit of sense. I was looking for a story about the king though. So, i guess the reason i don't like it is that i'm biased. :)

chacham2 OP t1_itm39ax wrote on October 24, 2022 at 5:27 PM

Reply to comment by Crystal1501 in [WP] You wake up disoriented when offered some rags to cover your naked body. Eventually, you remember you were king. A coup used an arcane spell to change your looks and displace you, leaving only your family's birthmark. People assume you are dead, but the new ruler is still looking to kill you. by chacham2

Ah. I see.

I just didn't like that part of the story. But that is a really interesting idea.

chacham2 OP t1_itm28p3 wrote on October 24, 2022 at 5:21 PM

Reply to comment by Crystal1501 in [WP] You wake up disoriented when offered some rags to cover your naked body. Eventually, you remember you were king. A coup used an arcane spell to change your looks and displace you, leaving only your family's birthmark. People assume you are dead, but the new ruler is still looking to kill you. by chacham2

Thank you for the interesting reply! I can't say i like the warper, but the first part definitely had my interest.

chacham2 OP t1_itlkukr wrote on October 24, 2022 at 3:27 PM

Reply to comment by Crystal1501 in [WP] You wake up disoriented when offered some rags to cover your naked body. Eventually, you remember you were king. A coup used an arcane spell to change your looks and displace you, leaving only your family's birthmark. People assume you are dead, but the new ruler is still looking to kill you. by chacham2

> I personally was imagining some women found him by a riverbank a fair distance from the kingdom

Could be. Fair enough.

>would these people know who he was

The spell changed his looks, so no. Unless they knew of the birthmark.

chacham2 OP t1_itlkmtc wrote on October 24, 2022 at 3:25 PM

Reply to comment by Dbootloot in [WP] The monster now in place, you activate the magic circle, but instead find yourself sinking into the ground. "This is the only way," your friend said, "I'll take care of your wife and children." Decades later you finally awake and find him heralded as hero, and you, listed as a casualty of war. by chacham2

Nice contribution, if hard to follow and understand.

chacham2 OP t1_itlk28p wrote on October 24, 2022 at 3:21 PM

Reply to comment by Crystal1501 in [WP] You wake up disoriented when offered some rags to cover your naked body. Eventually, you remember you were king. A coup used an arcane spell to change your looks and displace you, leaving only your family's birthmark. People assume you are dead, but the new ruler is still looking to kill you. by chacham2

Not terribly relevant.

I was imagining by other homeless people around the outskirts of town, or maybe a guard. But that added too many characters (pun not intended).